jake <jake (AT) gododdin (DOT) demon.co.uk> wrote:
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".... We are a husband and wife act utilizing comedy and juggling for
entertainment with family values ...." |
Though Jake is an idiot, this is correct, mostly.
Your and your wife are jugglers for hire!
You bury the above quote under four graphics and a lot of text. It is
hidden at the top of more plain text just like it. The words that you use
to describe what you do are obscure. It would not take much to turn your
only description into a Mojo Jojo-esque farce.
What the heck is "utilizing comedy"?
Is it like "All creatures will make merry upon pain of death"?
Ummm .... what's a family value? That is a very touchy buzzword in my
country.
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It would be rather hard to go through your site and not know exactly
what you do ;-) |
The trouble is, will a client go THROUGH the site, slogging through such
gems as the above as quoted by jake?
You use devilsticks? Not in my community you won't.
....
Imagine an uneducated person conjuring pictures of wooden phallic symbols
flying through the air above the heads of children ... devilsticks ...
certainly not the image a client needs. I trust the exaggeration pushes
home the importance of clarity and simplicity plus the need for pictures
and a little education?
The Doormouse
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