English Critique Wanted from Adobe Flex Samples

I want Enlish critque from my Adobe Flex 2 Smaples:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/2/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/3/

These is not official WWW sites and they are only Flex 2 sample work..

On 2007-05-01, Matti Kiviharju wrote:

I want Enlish critque from my Adobe Flex 2 Smaples:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/2/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/3/

All I see is a button to click if I want to run the flash. Without
any reason to do so, I'll just leave the page.

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Chris F.A. Johnson <http://cfaj.freeshell.org>
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Author:
Shell Scripting Recipes: A Problem-Solution Approach (2005, Apress)

Matti Kiviharju wrote:

I want Enlish critque from my Adobe Flex 2 Smaples:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/

I'm not sure what newsgroup would be appropriate for something like
this, but I don't think alt.html.critique is it. As the group name
suggests, we critique HTML here. You don't have much of that at all. I
can't see anything anyway, since I have both Flash and JavaScript
disabled most of the time.

--
Berg

Matti Kiviharju wrote:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/2/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/3/

Oooooommmmm.

I see ... empty space. So much empty space. No thoughts. No words. No
sight. Gone.

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Matti Kiviharju wrote:

I want Enlish critque from my Adobe Flex 2 Smaples:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/2/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/3/

The other posters who see blank pages are lucky. I get three pages of
weird bendy animations that do nothing specific but take up 90% of my
CPU. Both make me nauseated...

These is not official WWW sites and they are only Flex 2 sample work..

"Not official WWW sites?" Meaning, they're not really for Web use? If
so, why are we looking at them?

--
John

Matti Kiviharju wrote:

I want Enlish critque from my Adobe Flex 2 Smaples:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/2/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/3/

These is not official WWW sites and they are only Flex 2 sample work..

Happy to help.

I am doing a critique of you post instead, as the flex files you linked to
do not in fact contain any English. Lorem ipsum does not count. It's not
even really Latin!

a) English, not Enlish
b) critique, not critque
c) samples, not Smaples
d) "These are not", not "These is not"
e) "and they are only", the "and" at the beginnning is not needed, instead
use a comma

:P

Nik Coughlin wrote:

Matti Kiviharju wrote:
I want Enlish critque from my Adobe Flex 2 Smaples:

http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/1/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/2/
http://portfolio.teknologiaplaneetta.com/flex/3/

These is not official WWW sites and they are only Flex 2 sample
work..

Happy to help.

I am doing a critique of you post instead, as the flex files you
linked to do not in fact contain any English. Lorem ipsum does not
count. It's not even really Latin!

a) English, not Enlish
b) critique, not critque
c) samples, not Smaples
d) "These are not", not "These is not"
e) "and they are only", the "and" at the beginnning is not needed,
instead use a comma

Pfft, you can talk Nik!

a) You missed that Matti should have put the word "an" between "want" and
"English" on the first line
b) In your reply you say "critique of you post" instead of "critique of your
post"
c) In the same sentence, Flex should be capitalised (that's capitalized for
all you Americans out there)

Talk about throwing stones in glass houses!

:P

On 2007-05-02, Nik Coughlin wrote:

I am doing a critique of you post instead, as the flex files you linked to
do not in fact contain any English. Lorem ipsum does not count. It's not
even really Latin!
....
e) "and they are only", the "and" at the beginnning is not needed, instead
use a comma

A comma would create a run-on sentence; a semi-colon would be
appropriate.

--
Chris F.A. Johnson <http://cfaj.freeshell.org>
================================================== =================
Author:
Shell Scripting Recipes: A Problem-Solution Approach (2005, Apress)

John Hosking wrote:

Matti Kiviharju wrote:

The other posters who see blank pages are lucky. I get three pages of
weird bendy animations that do nothing specific but take up 90% of my
CPU. Both make me nauseated...
"Not official WWW sites?" Meaning, they're not really for Web use? If
so, why are we looking at them?

Yes, they are for web-use. You can only watch Flax 2 solutions from hard
disk if you view them in HTML file. Not Official means that I am not ever
go to make web sites for customer or my self with multiple .flv videos on
background bacause it seem to take too much resources from visitor
computer.

Single video on Flex 2 solution is good and not take much resources. These
samples takes much resources because there is about 5 big videos that runs
same time with Action Script 3 effects like opacity etc.